Red Door

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Myra
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Red Door

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(or with all the I's it could be I I I - Me Me Me )


Red Door

I know that it’s selfish
but I want my turn soon.
I’ve been waiting here for a while now
and I can’t help but notice
that lots of people are going through
and I want in too.
I want to spin and fall
and be flung across the room.
I want to fall inside of your eyes*
and never crawl out.
I want ‘in love’ not just love
me
. . . . me me me
you . . you . you
moments of just you
. waiting, for moments of just you
I want to bury myself in your hair
lost in the smell of coconut
Hawaiian tropic, sandy toes
salt on your skin
. . please, . don’t leave
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mat james
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Re: Red Door

Post by mat james »

I want to fall inside of your eyes*
and never crawl out.
Wow Myra! Great line.
I love your poem.

Mat.
"Without light or guide, save that which burned in my heart." San Juan de la Cruz.
Myra
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Re: Red Door

Post by Myra »

thank you Mat :)
jabble524
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Re: Red Door

Post by jabble524 »

I enjoyed this. I liked the idea of falling into someone's eyes and never crawling out. That was a really great image.
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