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mickey_one wrote:a line of poets
just like a line of cocaine
is bad for your head

Is bad for your head
a hurricane for the heart
a storm for the soul

Paula - have you been airbrushed from history? What happened to
a plaice for fish, a
storm in a teacup, haddock
soup for the sole's soul
?

I don't really understand the making of a Haiku Damellon and I didn't want to ruin the flow in case my contribution was not actually perceived as part of it.

Give me a potted explaination of Haiku's please

Paula

My limited knowledge is that it has 3 lines. First line has 5 syllables, second line has 7 syllables, third line has 5 syllables, so the pattern is 5-7-5. Ideally there is a reference to Nature in it and some tie-in between that and a not too obvious discovery you've made. Andrew McGeever on the serious Haiku thread gives this as an example -
A fallen flower
returning to the branch?
It was a butterfly

As you can see in this thread we haven't abided by the rule of including some natural element, but this is supposed to be fun, so we're allowed, I think. In this never - ending Haiku your first line must be the previous entry's last line.
Hope this helps. Join in.

soup for the sole's soul
was never made of chicken
it was butterflies

It was butterflies
Dancing as fire through sunset;
innumerable

innumerable
naturalised poets shed
their inhibitions

William wrote:innumerable
naturalised poets shed
their inhibitions

Their inhibitions
lost in the potting shed like
Lady Chatterley's

damellon wrote:

William wrote:innumerable
naturalised poets shed
their inhibitions

Their inhibitions
lost in the potting shed like
Lady Chatterley's

Lady Chatterley's
fucked the game keeper Mellor
Lawrence best -seller

laurence best seller
of naked gardener washing
observed by lady lust

jimbo wrote:laurence best seller
of naked gardener washing
observed by lady lust

errr, your middle line has 8 syllables, your last line has 6 or 7.

you could keep to your meaning, and the "rules" by changing it to

Lawrence best seller
naked gardener washing
ob seen lady lust

'gardener' pronounced gardner by some, so that may be the problem. Maybe 'seen by Lady Lust', Jimbo?

damellon wrote:'gardener' pronounced gardner by some, so that may be the problem. Maybe 'seen by Lady Lust', Jimbo?

yes, you are right- there is no need to fuss when many would pronounce "gardener" as 2 syllables. but i still prefer "ob seen by Lady Lust"

yes M_1 - if you say 'ob seen Lady Lust', but the last one you wrote says 'ob seen by Lady Lust' but it has 1 too many syllables! -unless in aristocratic circles 'Lady' is abridged to 1 syllable ...now I'm being picky!
Did you disqualify Martine? No sign of her today.

Perhaps, his counting never made it past 'laid.'


~ Lizzy