Five poems
Five poems
I've been away for a while
Let's pretend I went
Where the Athenians go
In the summer to
Escape the heat
And where fish go
In the net of
Friendly Fishermen
I've been looking for a while
For men go looking
For good looking
healthy cooking
Frauleins
Sometimes
I'm back in town
Didn't they tell you
That I'm back in town
Don't jump up and down
My Lennie
I find my old car attractive
It still runs on my command
The motor stutters
The blinkers blink
this poem has no link
and no future
I need my reset
Gonna follow the economy
Wanna be where no girls go
Wanna lean against a stone
Wanna close my eyes
And say yes
that's it
Let's pretend I went
Where the Athenians go
In the summer to
Escape the heat
And where fish go
In the net of
Friendly Fishermen
I've been looking for a while
For men go looking
For good looking
healthy cooking
Frauleins
Sometimes
I'm back in town
Didn't they tell you
That I'm back in town
Don't jump up and down
My Lennie
I find my old car attractive
It still runs on my command
The motor stutters
The blinkers blink
this poem has no link
and no future
I need my reset
Gonna follow the economy
Wanna be where no girls go
Wanna lean against a stone
Wanna close my eyes
And say yes
that's it
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Re: Five poems
hello, the preponderance of capital letters for the line starts is rather off-putting. these are little poems and certainly do not need the starting capitals. weirdly, there are odd lines which don't have them, like "healthy cooking".
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Now you got me sit and think, LOL. Why do those few lines begin without capital letters, what is my subconscious trying to let me know. Too much of a cliché to find, that there is a crack in everything. No - we had that before. There must be some message .... hm maybe by Monday I will have an answer.
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Re: Five poems
your subconcious was telling you that you had a one verse masterpiece . here are the 4 lines where you used lower case. I have extracted and brilliantly joined them together.
healthy cooking
this poem has no link
and no future
that's it
masterpiece or not?
healthy cooking
this poem has no link
and no future
that's it
masterpiece or not?
Re: Five poems
Thank you, LOL - you are one kind lion. A master lion. Kisses.
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Monday wrote:Thank you, LOL - you are one kind lion. A master lion. Kisses.
thank you. I am going to change my name to Rory
Re: Five poems
or should I say "You are a one way rebster" ?Monday wrote:Thank you, LOL - you are one kind lion. A master lion. Kisses.
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there's only one....Monday wrote:or should I say "You are a one way rebster" ?Monday wrote:Thank you, LOL - you are one kind lion. A master lion. Kisses.
Re: Five poems
Wanna lean against a stone
Wanna close my eyes
And say yes
that's it
Simple yet profound!
Wanna close my eyes
And say yes
that's it
Simple yet profound!
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Re: Five poems
Hey, Moonstone- I don't think Monday is her real name
Lion of Lions- Your Maine Man
Lion of Lions- Your Maine Man